Writhing limbs,
dripping wet,
drumbeats become heartbeats.
Hungry eyes,
seeking touch,
devouring lips,
against hot city brick.
Pulsing and throbbing,
in summer’s nights heat,
we are one.
It has been so hot here. It reminded of my going out days when the brick would burn your hands at midnight if you touched it. Being at the bars dancing and dripping on the dance floor w. just a skimpy sundress. And, I think the poem says the rest.
This is my first Poetry Train.
Welcome aboard! (Whoo-whoo)
I like these lines:
“against hot city brick.
Pulsing and throbbing,
in summer’s nights heat”
I can feel the nubbly surface and the heat of the brick.
Love this poem! So much going on! It’s fast paced.
Great poem! Happy Monday!
favorite line, “hot city brick”.
Nice poem.
Very erotic,
In winter the hot city brick is harder to find. Enjoy the heat and passion of summer.
LOVE it, Nancy! I’m glad you’re joining the Poetry Train; this is every bit as hot (bad pun; sorry) as what the eroti-chicks write. I’m lovin’ it!!
Great poem, welcome to the party…er poetry train.
Thanks for coming by! I LOVE your website - so beautiful and fun. I’ll definitely be stopping by in the future.
Oops! I forgot it was Monday and therefore Poetry Train day!
Glad you joined. I really like this poem. The ing verbs give it such a vibrant feel.
I agree the repetition of “ing” gives this poem a special feel. To me it gives the poem rhythm and beat. Whether that’s appropriate for the dancing at the beginning or the dancing at the end, I don’t know. I find it appropriate for both!
Thanks for all the nice feedback. I really don’t put much of my writing out there for the world to see. But, this was fun and I will do it again.
It is at last starting to heat up over here. We haven’t been over 90 this whole summer.
Hot! I liked the imagery, but there was so much more that added to it, the hot brick and the drumbeats.
I too picked up on the rhythm of the poem and I like they way Barry Hess described it.
I’m with Lisa - this one had that sweaty, hot, urban beat and with the hot theme the erotic overtones are perfect. Welcome aboard the Train Nancy! Yay! There’s some damn fine prose, poetry and wips posted this week!
The heat of the summer might make us do crazy stuff, you poem prove it!!
I am so glad you submitted. You so belong more with this crew then I do
Nancy I could just see you standing up at a Open Mic night to read this. Very cool - or should I say hot?
Pulsing and throbbing!
Yes, the poem says the rest! It reminded me of walking barefoot on a road so hot my feet would burn.